Bye
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I just wanted to say it was fun blogging with you guys. Maybe I will blog with you for another online class. I will be taking a lot more classes these next couple of years

The End
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Well this online class went by fast. I was just wondering what any of your guys future plans are going to be

Proposal Assignment Draft
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David Goodman
Professor Rosemary Mink
English Composition 101
June 27, 2009
Proposal Assignment Draft
“Amtrak”
Amtrak is a great way in which we can help the world and our local towns. Amtrak is a high speed train that connects cities to each other. Amtrak has many positive attributes along with faster speed travel and no hassle with a car. Amtrak is energy efficient, safe, number one for traveler’s choice, and economic friendly. Amtrak is a positive attribute to our local area connecting Utica to Syracuse.
The problem with no Amtrak is that people have to drive on the thruway for a longer time and are not that safe. “In 1955, there were 65 million vehicles on U.S. highways. Today there are 246 million. By 2055 this number is expected to reach 400 million.”(5) There are too many cars on the road which is the reason for so many accidents. As for one my mother travels to Syracuse everyday. She has to wake up at five in the mourning and she gets home around six. With this high speed train she will wake up later and be home faster along with saving on her car. Without this train we are not encouraging growth in our city and without this train people cannot work and find jobs in other areas.
Amtrak is an energy efficient high speed train which will help our area. “Amtrak is 17 percent more energy efficient than either commercial airlines or automobiles. Air travel has an additional disadvantage of radiative forcing, which increases the climate effect of air travel by 2 to 4 times as compared to surface travel.”(1) Amtrak will not only help our area, but it is helping our environment and our dependence on foreign oil. With this train in my mother’s case she drives about thirty thousand miles a year just form her job and at fifty cents a mile which is the states minimum that is fifteen thousand dollars a year in just travel. That is just for one person imagine how much our community could save with this Amtrak.
Safety is key to everyone and their family. When driving on the thruway it is very dangerous with tractor trailers especially in the winter. “Rail transit passengers are 40 times less likely to be involved in a fatal accident and 20 times less likely to be involved in an accident that results in an injury than automobile passengers.”(2) Those percentages are huge especially for your safety. This area does not have good winters and with many people driving on the road it crucial to their safety to take the Amtrak.
In a survey of Americans they wanted to see more rail transportation. “Harris Polls have found that almost 4 in 5 adults would like to see more long distance and commuter passenger rail options, and 44 percent of Americans would like to see an increasing portion of travel by rail. Almost two-thirds of Americans surveyed in a 2004 study said their communities needed more transportation options.”(3) I know in this area we prefer them too. I know in the future that I want to live around here, but would like to work in Syracuse at a Wegman’s store as a Pharmacist. With this Amtrak in our area I would be able to travel a lot easier.
With our economy doing bad Amtrak is economic friendly. “According to the U.S. Department of Transportation, every $1 billion invested in transportation creates approximately 47,500 transportation-related as well as ancillary jobs (service industry, finance, etc.).”(4) Our area can use those jobs and would maybe lower our county taxes. Utica and Syracuse need jobs and this Amtrak will help our cities thrive.
Amtrak is high speed trains that will help our city grow in prosperity. Amtrak will help save our families money and will also promote jobs. Amtrak has many positive attributes that will help in the future as well. Amtrak is pursuing better technology each year and is accomplishing so much. That is why I think Amtrak can help our city so much.

Weather
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Is there anyone else that cannot take this weather anymore. I really want to move down to Florida. Everyday I wake up it is cloudy and rainy. New York is supposed to have great summers.

Do people wake up miserable
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I work at a lumber yard and I swear sometimes people walk in just to be mean. Men and women both come in and have this feeling that we are out to get them. People really have to just smile and calm down.

Proposal
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David Goodman
Professor Rosemary Mink
English Composition 101
June 19, 2009
Evaluative Essay
Best Proposal
Proposals are everywhere trying to give, sell, or promote something. There are many jobs in today’s society to do those such things. With the six essays written there all trying to propose something. The four essays are, “A Trail of DNA and Data” by Paul Saffo, “Coal in a Nice Shade of Green” by Thomas Homer-Dixon and S. Julio Friedmann, “The Micromagic of Microcredit” by Karol Bourdreaux and Tyler Cowe, “The Declaration of Independence” by Thomas Jefferson.
“A Trail of DNA and Data” by Paul Saffo uses aesthetic criteria to propose the idea of DNA. “Intersection camera scanned your licenses plate and your guilty face.”(Saffo). He is trying to explain that the use of DNA for identification is wrong. People can know and use your DNA on you. “The Micromagic of Microcredit” by Karol Bourdreaux and Tyler Cowe also used aesthetic criteria for their proposal.
“The Declaration of Independence” by Thomas Jefferson was a very important document in American history. His proposal used ethical criteria to show his purpose. “When in the course of human events it becomes necessary for one people to dissolve the political bads which have connected them with another.”(Jefferson) He was proposing the idea to break away from King George and his rule. “Coal in a Nice Shade of Green” by Thomas Homer-Dixon and S. Julio Friedmann”, also used ethical criteria to explain their proposal.
Proposals are for one purpose to get a point across to another person and to even persuade them. With the four selections they were all great proposals in which they got their point across. “A Trail of DNA and Data” by Paul Saffo, “Coal in a Nice Shade of Green” by Thomas Homer-Dixon and S. Julio Friedmann, “The Micromagic of Microcredit” by Karol Bourdreaux and Tyler Cowe, “The Declaration of Independence” by Thomas Jefferson all used proposals.

Criteria
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There are three main categories to evaluations. The three components are ethical criteria, practical criteria, and aesthetic criteria. Ethical criteria is when people think something is morally correct. Practical criteria is when people like something because it works well. Aesthetic criteria is what I think most people evaluate with is how things look and appear.

Morals
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I was just wondering if you seen a guy drop a hundred dollar bill and walked away would you give it to him or keep it? If you were working and you found a way to steal with out getting caught would you? Or does it depend on the circumstances.

Prefrences
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Do you like people who joke around. I know a lot of people who take jokes so seriously and are offended. Me personally, I always joke around and play jokes on people. I always think jokes break the ice and help relationships.

Reflection draft for a grade
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I choose the reflection draft for a grade because I did not feel to comfortable about the informative draft. I put a lot of time and effort into this paper. I read and used the text book for answers to this assignment. I think this paper is well described and well written. One strength to this paper is I answered all the questions for the task of the paper. I do not think I use big words when I write. Another flaw I have is I do not know if the reader understands what I am saying.





David Goodman
Professor Rosemary Mink
English Composition 101
May 27, 2009
“Reflection Draft”
“A New Approach after Reading”
My thoughts and goals for college writing varied after reading. When I first wrote my goals I had a broad opinion about college writing. I thought college writing was mainly about better sentences, the use of proper grammar, and to interest the reader. After reading the text I understood there is a lot more to expect and to learn. The book “A Guide to College Writing and Beyond” by Lester Faigley shows so much more to college writing than just writing an essay and turning it in. One of the first things he discussed was looking with new eyes. It was very interesting because when you think about things you have a general opinion. When you look close you find important details and clues as in writing. One example he showed was a door, when you look at an old door up close you can see the old paint chips pealing.
A major conflict between my old goal and my new goal is I thought writing is mostly about better sentences and the use of proper grammar. I had a broad opinion before, but now I understand the complexity of college writing. During my reading I understood that there is a whole lot more. With writing you have to explore new territories and ask questions to the readers in which they do not know. When you tell them things they already know, what is the point of reading? You have to spark the reader with new and important information. One alignment was you have to interest the reader. Find a topic that interests you and the reader, sometimes when you write something you do not like you do not write to the fullest of your ability.
One enormous and most important area I skipped over was planning before you write. In high school I usually just started typing and never planned or did research. In the textbook he talked about the classic questions who, what, when, where, why. When you plan you succeed on your paper and it becomes easier when you write. Brainstorming is another important way to a great paper. Thinking about what you are going to write helps because now you have something to write about. Writing down important information and key items helps you when you write papers. Without these written notes you stop and think what to write about and your paper can become choppy by switching from different ideas as they pop in your head. Doing research and finding information about your topic is also important. You have to be knowledgeable about what you are writing because otherwise the reader will be confused and will not want to finish. Find interesting facts for the reader so he/she wants to keep exploring your paper.
Faigley states in the book which I agree with strongly is annotating with a pencil. When you annotate you are rewarding yourself in which when you go back your notes will help you. After reading a text you may not remember all the key facts stated by the author in which when you go back your annotations will help. Writing is not everything, but putting your shoes in the reader’s eyes is what is important. You may understand what is going on, but you’re the one writing, make sure others can comprehend. The thesis is the most important part of the essay because it states the point in which you are writing the essay, but it does not come out in just say it. The author emphasized the thesis because the thesis is your foundation of the paper. Revising and editing your essay is another major part, which I agree with Faigley. The first time you write your paper you just throw out thoughts you do not really think about them which is why rereading and revising is crucial. All these crucial steps I missed and overlooked as college writing. These are the basic and fundamental steps to writing.
Blogging helps you stay informed with others, about your ideas, and papers. Sometimes your viewer has a different outlook than you which can be helpful. After reading the text I have become less anxious. I have become less anxious because I am not good in English and writing. I find it hard to concentrate and comprehend when reading. There was a lot more than I expected but this is a college course. I know if I work hard and use the techniques described by Faigley I will be successful in the end.

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